Comments for c17cd

Comment on West Virginia by Ms. Kirsch

Ms. Kirsch — Mon, 01 Jun 2009 18:26:55 +0000

Great work! This looks fantastic — well researched and written! My only comments are to proofread your articles, as there are some places where you’ve left out words (and, is, the) and so the sentences don’t make sense. Also, when you quote Mary Lou’s coach, you need to give the name of the coach — who was he?

Comment on Nevada by jkirsch

jkirsch — Thu, 14 May 2009 15:14:44 +0000

This is wonderful! Well-written, full of interesting and specific detail, and carefully organized. The only thing missing are your resources?

Comment on Things That are Great About This Book by edinger

edinger — Sun, 03 May 2009 10:50:51 +0000

You definitely have made people eager to read this book, I promise you! One thing I will be curious to see is how it is for kids who read it on their own — I talked to you sometimes as I read it, but what will those with no adult around make of it, do you think? I think they will still love it — what do you think?

Comment on Alice 1 by edinger

edinger — Fri, 17 Apr 2009 11:45:19 +0000

I very much enjoyed reading this first post in your Alice series — can’t wait to read your next one!

Comment on The Green Book vs. Pilgrims by Ms. Kirsch

Ms. Kirsch — Thu, 16 Apr 2009 00:51:04 +0000

Very nice! I especially love your introduction and conclusion. Thank you for editing this post.

Comment on Oral History by becky

becky — Wed, 15 Apr 2009 03:08:36 +0000

I love your pictures and the story of your mother coming to America to be with your father. What a lovely story!

Comment on The Green Book vs. Pilgrims by Jennifer Kirsch

Jennifer Kirsch — Tue, 14 Apr 2009 12:03:51 +0000

You have mentioned some important points of comparison, but this is a list, not a paragraph! Please edit this post so that it is a properly formatted paragraph (Introduction, Body, Conclusion) and email me to let me know it’s finished.

Comment on Mourt’s Relation by Ms.Kirsch

Ms.Kirsch — Wed, 08 Apr 2009 13:04:11 +0000

What a gorgeous illustration!

Comment on My Cindy Story by c17ar

c17ar — Wed, 11 Mar 2009 22:02:20 +0000

I loved your story but there were a few missed spelled homophones in it. Look it over.

Comment on My Cindy Story by c17nl

c17nl — Tue, 10 Mar 2009 21:58:15 +0000

I think your story is really very good. I like how a mother is telling her daughter the story!!